Cupid’s Arrow

I pulled the bowstring back, feeling the tension as the flight of the arrow rested by my cheek. I had been watching the couple all afternoon. They had found themselves nestled in the woods, and I could not be happier for the solace of the trees. I knew I didn’t have much time, others would be coming, looking for them. I needed to hit my mark with accuracy the first time. There was no margin for error. I noticed how nervously she began brushing her hair behind her ear. Her eyes longing to lock with his, but lacking the courage. I watched the boy, too aloof to notice how she wanted him. One shot and she would be his. One shot and their entire world would change for good.

I couldn’t have them see me, but I needed to be closer to ensure my victory. I inched my foot further on the twisted branch that held me high in my hiding spot, afraid to allow a single breath to escape from my chest. It hurt my body to be so still. It felt as though my very blood was solidifying inside me. I had to hold on, just a moment longer. The joy would be worth the pain. He was almost in my view. Then my moment arrived.

I shot my arrow through the plump cherub’s heart, and watched as he fell from mid air to his doom.

They say love never dies.

They obviously never met me.



43 thoughts on “Cupid’s Arrow

  1. Lizzie Koch says:

    The link wasn’t working but some ink friends have sorted out the glitch and it’s up and running for you to add your post to the link.
    What a glorious twist to your story. I really enjoyed reading your entry and was sucked in. Thank you for entering our blog hop. . . .it’s been updated now . . . .to prizes. . . . .eeek . . . .I’ll update my blog page but in the meantime, take a look here where you can also link up your fab story. . xxx

  2. Loved this, ending totally got me. Perfect start to the Blog Hop. 🙂

  3. Bullish says:

    This is just wonderful!! All the time the reader is hoping cupid’s arrow will hit them – and to have cupid hit by an arrow is just so deliciously unexpected!! So happy you joined the hop!! 🙂

  4. Beautiful description, especially of her brushing her hair nervously behind her ear…I was really rooting for them… unfortunately this is not the contest for happy endings… Great story!

  5. Very well done! Really enjoyed it, flowed really well, and totally unexpected end, which made me smile!

  6. I agree with all of the above! Great entry!
    Who needs cupid anyway? 😉

  7. […] Cupid’s Arrow Cupid’s Arrow February 8, 2013 by Karen Hoffman I pulled the bowstring back, feeling the tension as the flight of the arrow rested by my … 00Share […]

  8. heh heh heh – just in the spirit of the meme – loved it!

  9. Take that, Cupid! Ha! Like it when Cupid get his just reward. 🙂

  10. Sarah says:

    you can’t get any more anti-Valentine than killing off cupid – and with a bow and arrow too – nice touch! 😉

  11. I loved the building anticipation.

  12. Elin Gregory says:

    *snicker* That moment when the flight touches your anchor point is just glorious but I suspect that our hero’s shots are more accurate than mine ever were. Grand story. 🙂

  13. Ann Judson says:

    Beautifully written stringing us along until the ending. Very poetic too I thought. Particularly liked the phrase ‘plump cherub’s heart.’

  14. vanessa says:

    Wow. Totally reeled me in. Well done. Who is this nefarious archer? I hope we learn what has brought him to this. More. More!

  15. Very nice. Great twist. Oh what must have happened to the man who hates Cupid so much…

  16. C. Fitz says:

    You’ve captured the tension of the moment so beautifully and poor Cupid! Thank you for this!

  17. Brilliant tension build, with such a good twist, totally unsuspecting!

  18. Deborah Makin says:

    Cupid’s Arrow by Karen Hoffman
    Excellent story with a wonderful twist!

  19. Love-love-love it! Delicately wrought yet so perfect!! I read it over & over : )

  20. Rose says:

    Cupids Arrow by Karen Hoffman
    Great story……

  21. jessie says:

    Cupid’s arrow by Karen Hoffman ….it is a winner !

  22. […] FAVORITE = "Cupid's Arrow" by Karen […]

  23. Karen, the Inklingettes are happy to announce that you won the Fan Favorite contest! Please twitter DM your email address to @laurahoward78 or email it to so we can get your pretty bookmark on it’s way to you!! Congratulations!! 🙂

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Logo

You are commenting using your account. Log Out /  Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )


Connecting to %s